ROUGH DRAFT

Rough Draft

Slums are not the neatest place to live in or the ideal home. A slum is a overcrowded, run-down, inhabited place for poor people. Slums negatively impact humans through a chain of events; overpopulation leads to extreme pollution, which causes an overflow on polluted streams. One negative impact of a slum is…..

Slums are very overpopulated because most poor people live there. “41.6 million people, live in slums.” Millions and millions  of  poor people live in slums everyday. Some can not afford a home so they live in slums. Second negative impact of  slums are…

Overpopulation  causes extreme pollution. “ they’re very crowded and the slum is very dirty” since of the slums are crowded they get very, very, very dirty. Since all the crowdedness of all the poor people bunched up and the slums became very dirty. The third negative  impact of slums are……

Sewage streams overflow and pollutes of course it floods the slums. “Polluted stream  sometimes overflow and floods them.” The polluted streams get full so it overflowed and flood the slums. Sewage streams overflows and  floods the slums. The conclusion is…………

Slums are not the best place to live in. Slums negatively impact humans through a chain of events; overpopulation leads to extreme pollution, which causes overflow on polluted streams. Millions of people live in slums, because of overpopulation, and it is dirty, plus the sewage streams overflow most of the time in every slum.

INTRODUCTION PARAGRAPH

Slums are not the neatest place to live in or the ideal home.A slum is a overpopulated, run-down, inhabited place for poor people. Slums negatively impact humans through a chain of events;overpopulation leads to extreme pollution, which causes an overflowon polluted streams. one negative impact of humans is.......

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SLUM OUTLINE

I.INTRODUCTION
A:Slums are not the place to live in in(not the fantasy home)
B:A slum is a overpopulated,run-down, inhabited place for poor people.
c:Slums negatively impact humans through a chain of events: overpopulation leads to extreme pollution, which creates an overflow of polluted streams.
D:The first defendable point is...
II.DEFENDABLE POINT #1
A:Slums are overpopulated
B:"41.6 million people live in slums." million  and millions live in slums everyday.
C:Some can not afford hoes so live in slums.
D:Second negative impact of slums are...
III.DEFENDABLE POINT #2
A:Overpopulation causes extreme pollution
B:"They are very crowded and the slum is very dirty" since the slums are crowded they get very, very dirty.
C:Since million people in slum it got very dirty and smelly.
D:The third negative effect of slums are...
IV:DEFENDABLE POINT#3
A:Sewage stream overflows ans pollutes of course it floods the slums.
B:"The polluted stream sometimes overflows and floods them." The polluted streams were full so it overflowed and and flood the slums. 
C:Sewage stream overflows and floods the slums.
D:The conclusion is.......
V: CONCLUSION
A:Slums are not the best place to live in
B:Slums negatively impact humans through a chain of events: overpopulation leads to extreme pollution, which creates an overflow polluted streams.
C:Millions of people live in slums, because of overpopulation, it is dirty sewage streams overflows.
D:

THESIS STATEMENT.

Slums negatively impact humans through a chain of events: overpopulation leads to extreme pollution, which creates an overflow of polluted streams.